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A Haiku is a short poetry of Japanese origin that is made up of three lines, arranged in such a manner that the number of syllables in the lines are 5-7-5. That is five syllables in the first line, seven in the second and five in the third.

So, this thread is dedicated to any wannabe poets here who would like to try their hands at making Haiku.

Further reading:
Haiku - Wikipedia
Haiku subreddit

Here are some haikus I have written in the Haiku subreddit linked above:

Annihilation / of the wicked will commence / In their darkened shrines

A failure of health / and of mind, body and soul / lay in death's embrace.

Today, tomorrow / I drown my life of sorrows / Green spirit of pain

The weight of the world / Upon my shoulders I bear / Humbly I submit

Just another day / My heart crumbles and mind breaks / Such great depression.

Forsaken at birth / The world seems too alien / How do I exist?

Sown the seeds of hope / Showered with drops of promises / Reap disappointment

I look to my past / There is brightness and sunshine / But today is grim.
 

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A Haiku is a short poetry of Japanese origin that is made up of three lines, arranged in such a manner that the number of syllables in the lines are 5-7-5. That is five syllables in the first line, seven in the second and five in the third.

So, this thread is dedicated to any wannabe poets here who would like to try their hands at making Haiku.

Further reading:
Haiku - Wikipedia
Haiku subreddit

Here are some haikus I have written in the Haiku subreddit linked above:

Annihilation / of the wicked will commence / In their darkened shrines

A failure of health / and of mind, body and soul / lay in death's embrace.

Today, tomorrow / I drown my life of sorrows / Green spirit of pain

The weight of the world / Upon my shoulders I bear / Humbly I submit

Just another day / My heart crumbles and mind breaks / Such great depression.

Forsaken at birth / The world seems too alien / How do I exist?

Sown the seeds of hope / Showered with drops of promises / Reap disappointment

I look to my past / There is brightness and sunshine / But today is grim.
You've got some great ideas, that you can expand to longer forms of poetry(like a tanka). I specially liked the second last one.
 
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I am not exactly a happy man, so my haiku's are generally depressive s*** like that.
 

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a new haiku thread /
new poetry to be read /
butter with bread /
along to be fed. :rofl:
 
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Ok what are you talking about here??

Also, @Desmond David I don't understand the meaning of syllables yet, though I googled about it. Could you give me example from any of your Haikus?
It's the number of "sounds" in a word. For example:

The whole team is down - 1+1+1+1+1 = 5
Seven seconds remaining - 2+2+3 = 7
Bomb has been planted - 1+1+1+2 = 5

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So apparently today is Haiku day: Haiku Poetry Day

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Here's one that's a bit disturbing:

Welcome to flesh world
Where offal grow on the trees
And rivers run red

This is inspired by a horror concept I was thinking about but could not think of any way to use it.

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I wake up
I stare at the damn screen
I sleep


Does this count?
 

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I am corona /
I Destroy Economy /
I kill all your hope /

I think this has the 5-7-5 structure but this doesn't fit too well lol

Second try, much better imo

Leaves fall slowly /
Roads are empty and quiet /
It stalks from behind /

One more :

Went to grocery /
Bought a packet of Maggi /
Cashier starts coughing /
 
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I am corona /
I Destroy Economy /
I kill all your hope /

I think this has the 5-7-5 structure but this doesn't fit too well lol

Second try, much better imo

Leaves fall slowly /
Roads are empty and quiet /
It stalks from behind /

One more :

Went to grocery /
Bought a packet of Maggi /
Cashier starts coughing /
This is good

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English syllables are so weird compared to japanese where each syllable takes an equal amount of time.
 
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